The graph shows the percentage of people aged over 60 in Canada,Finland and Korea between 1950 and 2050.

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percentage

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of individuals over 60 years of age in three different countries,

Canada

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Finland

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and Korea, over a period of 100 years from 1950 to 2050. Korea had the lowest

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of elderly people in the year 1950,

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Canada

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and

Finland

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had almost a similar number of

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people.

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older citizens

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fluctates

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fluctuates

, declining to less than 5

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percentage

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in 1980, followed by a steady

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until 2050, making it the country with the most significant

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Canada

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and

Finland

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exhibits

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a gradual

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throughout the years.

Canada

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rose from more than 5 % in 1950 to 15 % in 1980, where it remained

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until 2000, before increasing to 25% in 2050.

Finland

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saw a similar

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, starting from less than 10

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percentage

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in 1950, grew steadily and reaching up to almost 25% in the year 2050

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Aug 13, 2025

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