The line graph gives information on the number of international visitors to the UK for various purposes from 1989 to 2009.

Overall
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, all categories experienced different trends during these years. The figures of business and holiday grew with some fluctuations,
the
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rate of visits to close people increased gradually In 1989, the value of
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holidays
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was just over 6.5
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after it experienced a
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increase to 9.5 much visitors in 1999, and it decreased slightly to 7.5 bank in 2004.
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, there was a gradual increase to 9
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visitors in the year 2009. Business travel was at 5.5
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at the beginning, after it decreased slowly to 4
million
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in 1990, and it increased rapidly to 7
million
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in 1999
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next,
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there was declining decline in 2004 , after that it rose to 8
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visitors . Visits to friends or relatives
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grew, from under 3
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in 1989 to around 6
million
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in 2005, but
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fell slightly to about 5.5
million
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in 2009

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