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You visited a town last month and told your friend that you would like to meet. However, you could not make it. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: express your apology why you could not meet making arrangements to meet him.

Dear Anmol, I am writing
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 to convey my sincere apologies for not
able
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being able
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 to make our plan of meeting
last
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 month, during my trip to Las
vegas
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Vegas
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. I know, it's been ages since we
last
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 saw each other, that's why I was expecting to meet you.
However
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, my health turned
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on an
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an
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the
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 opposite page
last
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 month. I experienced a very sharp pain in my chest
last
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 month, just a day prior to
flight
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a flight
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. I had to go to
hospital
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the hospital
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ugently
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urgently
. After performing tests throughout the night, doctors discovered an inflammation in my rib cartilage. I was prescribed to do bed rest for two weeks.
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, I had to cancel
my all
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 plans. You would be thrilled to know that
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 I have recovered now. I am coming next week to
vegas
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Vegas
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, so we will meet on
weekend
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the weekend
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. I am getting some homemade sweets , which my mom made for you. Can't wait to see you soon! Yours lovingly, Kajalpreet

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task response
The letter has the right idea: sorry, reason, and plan to meet. To get a higher mark, add a clear date and place for the next meet and use one idea in each part.
coherence
Try to break the text into three small parts: apology, the reason, and how we will meet. Use short paragraphs and linking words like Because, Also, So.
grammar
Watch small grammar mistakes and use correct names: Las Vegas and weekend.
tone
Friendly tone and warm close to a friend.
content
You explain why you could not meet and you offer a plan to meet soon.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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