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The free movement of goods across national borders has long been a controversial issue. Some people argue that it is necessary for economic growth, while other claim that it damages local industry. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Goods trading across national borders has become an interesting debate for some time.
in
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 my way of
thingking
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thinking
, trading across national
border
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borders
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 can not be implemented without
a
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apply
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clear guidance or policies. Having that said, some of the
benefit
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benefits
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 of having a
borderless
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 trading across the nation
such
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as
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that
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 it can help the competitiveness of every product and more products are available
world wide
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worldwide
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.
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, having
borderless
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 trading can be difficult for
local
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the local
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industry
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 without major capital, and
thus
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 making the
market
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 is occupied by big
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player
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players
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. Major
borderless
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 trading across
nation
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nations
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benefit
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apply
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are the competitiveness and availability
on
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of
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a product.
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for
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For
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 example, in Indonesia,
automotive
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the automotive
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industry
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 is growing thanks to the China
product
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products
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 that penetrate
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the indonesian
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indonesian
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Indonesian
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market
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. With cheaper,
wide
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wider
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 variety, but relatively
same
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the same
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 (or sometimes higher) quality
with
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as
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 Japan's automotive products, makes cars
are
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more accessible to more
indonesian
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Indonesian
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market
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.
Chinas
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China's
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 automotive
brand
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brands
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such
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, such
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 as Wuling and BYD, are among the top of
minds
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mind
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 automotives
seller
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sellers
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 in Indonesia. Unlike the major automotive
player
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 from China that has enough access to bigger capital, most local
industry
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player
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players
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are
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do
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 not
having
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have
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 enough capital to do their own research and marketing.
This
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 condition
are
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is
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 causing the underdevelopment of
local
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the local
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 car brand. In
Indonesian
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the Indonesian
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automative
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automotive
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market
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,
this
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is
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has
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 become
concern
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a concern
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 for some time for the government,
due to
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 the incapabilities of local car
player
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 competing in the
industry
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, and
thus
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 closing their business.
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this
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 condition can
also
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 be said in Indonesia for other
sector
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sectors
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such
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 as tools, heavy equipment, etc. To
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, I believe there
are
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is are
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 balance to be
maintain
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maintained
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 within the trading
industry
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.
Altough
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Although
borderless
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 nation trading
have
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has
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 its own
benefit
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benefits
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 for
consumer
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consumers
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, it
also
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have
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has
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 its own
problem
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problems
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 for
longer
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the long
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 run.
every
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Every
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player
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 in the
market
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 has to be able to
paly
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play
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 in the same playing field.

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structure
Plan your essay. Start with a short intro, then 2 body parts, and finish with a short end.
language
Use clear and simple sentences. Check spellings and fix big word mistakes.
examples
Give clear examples that fit the idea you make. Try to link facts to the point.
coherence
Keep one idea in each paragraph. Use linking words like first, also, but, so, however to join ideas.
content
The writer shows both views and gives a clear end.
example
There are real places to talk about, like Indonesia.
structure
The plan to end with a summary is seen.
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