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Band 4

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In
this
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 contemporary era, cleaning the workplace and house makes drastic changes in our lives.
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, many individuals argue that those areas should be cleaned and
organized
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. I will shed some light on the given notion and examine why it is important to clean their house and
work
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 area in the forthcoming paragraphs. One unprecedented merit of
clealiness
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cleanliness
 and
tideness
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tidiness
 is that it improves
overall
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people
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's wellbeing. As many infections and lethal viruses spread into the environment, their homes should be neat and clean. Owing to that, they can not be infected with these viruses. A prime illustration of
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 point is that
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 COVID-19, many
people
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 faced various problems with their lungs, and some of them lost their family members.
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, the more
people
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aware
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about
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of
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 cleanliness, the healthier they get. Another prominent factor of
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 sentence can not be overlooked, which helps to enhance
people
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's productivity. Putting things in their designated place at either their home or
work
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 can save time
to find
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finding
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 them. To illustrate, many Canadian
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 Industries follow industrial procedure to keep machine tools
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in at
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at
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a
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 particular place, which can be accessible during
work
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.
This
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 clearly represents that tidy and
organized
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organised
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 places bring advantages to
people
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. In my opinion, keeping our houses and
work
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 areas clean and
organized
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organised
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everything
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apply
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takes
times
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;
however
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, it can help to improve
overall
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 health and enhance our productivity at
work
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. To encapsulate,
althogh
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although
 keeping house and workplace clean offers minor drawbacks, it is equally true that it presents notable benefits
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 as
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 health and productivity.

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task
Be clear in your view at the start. Say your opinion in the first paragraph.
coherence
Use one idea per paragraph and begin with a clear sentence about the idea.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Mistakes like cannot, cleanliness, and other words need fixed.
content
The essay shows a plan and a view.
structure
There are three parts: intro, body, and end.
ideas
It uses an example about COVID to support health points.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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