The line graph below shows the unemployment rates in tree counitries between 1993 and 2007.

The line graph below shows the unemployment rates in tree counitries between 1993 and 2007.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph below shows the unemployment rates in tree counitries between 1993 and 2007.
The chart compares three developed countries (the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan) in terms of how many people were without work in these countries between 1993 and 2007.
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, the three regions unemployment different rates of unemployment in the time period.
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the percentage of unemployed in the rest of Europe and Japan rose with some fluctuations, the
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for the UK fell over time. As the
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shows, about 11 per
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of people unemployed were in the UK in 1993.
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, decreased considerably more than 5 per
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from 1994 to 2001. The percentage of unemployed remained unchanged at around 4 until 2005, but
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rose slightly to 5 per
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in 2007. The line
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shows more than 9 per
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of people unemployed in the rest of Europe in 1993.
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decreased slowly to 10 per
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from 1995 to 1999. Afterwards, the
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dropped sharply to 8 per
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in 2001,
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it remained unchanged in 2002 and 2005. In 2007, the percentage of unemployed declined to 5. In Japan, unemployment rates were 2 per
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in 1993.
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rose slowly till 2003. Afterwards,
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increased from 2004 to 2007.

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