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Percentages of Male and Female US Citizens Who Never Married

The provided bar chart illustrates the proportion of unmarried American individuals of both genders between 1990 and 2010.
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, it is evident that the percentage of individuals who had never been married before is increasing steadily over the period, with the growth rate among men consistently higher than that among women during the same period. First, LINKING WORDS
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 of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score. In 1990, there are approximately 25 per cent of males had never experienced marriage.
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 figure rose gradually to reach 27 per cent in 2005,
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 it experienced a slight upward
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 2008, before it peaked just below 30% in 2010.
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, the proportion of women who had never married started at its lowest point, around
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18% in 1990.
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 rate increased steadily to 21% in 2005 and 22% in 2008, before reaching just under 25% in 2010. .

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Give a clear start and end. This keeps your essay easy to read.
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You show a general idea that the share of never married people goes up.
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Numbers are given for both groups across years.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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