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The line graph below shows the unemployment rate of three countries between 1993 and 2007.

The line graph below shows the unemployment rate of three countries between 1993 and 2007.
The chart compares three different countries (the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan) in
unemployment
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 rates from 1993 to 2007.
Overall
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, the three regions experienced different trends in the time period.
While
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 the
unemployment
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rate
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 in the United Kingdom and European countries decreased with some fluctuations,
this
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rate
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 in Japan increased over time. As a graph shows, Europa's
unemployment
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rate
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 started just under 10 per
cent
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 in 1993, followed by an increase to 10 in 1997.
Then
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 it declined rapidly to 8 in 2001 and levelled off at
this
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rate
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 until it fell to around 7 per
cent
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 in 2007. Regarding the United Kingdom's
unemployment
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rate
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, in 1993 it was 11 per
cent
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, but
this
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 figure decreased rapidly to about 4 per
cent
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 by 2005 , and it rose to 5 per
cent
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 in 2007. Bu contrast, the
unemployment
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rate
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 in Japan witnessed an increase over a ten-year period. In 1993, 2 per
cent
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 of the Japanese population were unemployed, but
this
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 figure experienced a slight growth to 5 per
cent
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 by 2003.
Then
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, there was a steady decrease to 3 per
cent
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 in 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, rate, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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