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look at the two maps of a beach hotel a different times. make notes on the key changes in the following areas.

The two maps below illustrate the changes in a
beach
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hotel
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 in two different years, 2003 and 2013.
Overall
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, it can be seen a lot of changes during that period. The
beach
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hotel
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replaced
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was replaced
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 and expanded
some
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with some
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 accommodations and recreational
areas
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.
For example
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, there were a rectangular swimming pool in right
side
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 of the
map
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 in 2003.
Then
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 it was relocated to the left
side
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 and its shape was changed and developed,
also
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 some trees were planted around it.
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, a few
hotel
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 rooms were available in the upper part of the
map
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 in the first year. After that, they were transferred to the left upper corner of the
map
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 with an increase in the number of its rooms.
Furthermore
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, the restaurant
which
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, which
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 was
in
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on
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 the left
side
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 of the
map
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,
were
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was
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 moved to the middle right of the
map
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.
Additionally
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, the number of seating
areas
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 was
grown
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increased
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 and they were moved to the right
side
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 of the pool. Some new facilities were built in the
beach
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hotel
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.
For instance
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, a place for water sports was constructed
in
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at
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 the bottom of the restaurant. Apart from these
areas
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, a large fence
were
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was
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 removed. All in all,
it is clear that
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 the
beach
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hotel
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 improved, and a lot of recreational
areas
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, facilities and accommodations were added there.

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structure
Open with a clear main idea about what changed. Give two or three key points first.
grammar
Keep one past tense for the map talk. For example, say what was in 2003 and what became in 2013.
grammar
Use simple word choice. Use 'there was' or 'there were' and 'on the right side' rather than 'in the right side'.
cohesion
Link ideas with words like first, then, next, and finally to show order.
grammar
Check small errors in number and plural, like 'fence was removed' not 'fence were removed'.
structure
End with a short finish that sums up the change. A quick yes or no answer is good.
task value
You show a good idea to compare two maps.
cohesion
You use many linking words to show order.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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