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The chart below shows the expenditure in pounds of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure in pounds of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares spending by
France
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 and the
UK
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 on five consumer goods—
cars
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,
computers
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,
books
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,
perfume
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 and
cameras
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—in 2010, measured in pounds sterling.
Overall
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, the
UK
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 outspent
France
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 in three categories and recorded the highest single figure for
cars
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.
Cars
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 attracted the greatest outlay in both markets,
while
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 the smallest sums went to
perfume
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 in the
UK
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 and to
cameras
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 in
France
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. The most pronounced disparity concerned
cameras
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, where British spending was more than double the French total. In absolute terms, British expenditure on
cars
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 was the peak value, at about £450,000, modestly above
France
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’s £400,000. The
UK
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also
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 spent substantially more on
books
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, reaching just over £400,000 compared with roughly £300,000 in
France
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—
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around one third higher. Camera purchases showed an even larger gap: approximately £360,000 in the
UK
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 versus only £150,000 in
France
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.
By contrast
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,
France
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 led in the remaining two categories. Outlays on
computers
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 were close to £380,000 in
France
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, marginally exceeding the
UK
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’s £350,000. French spending on
perfume
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 was
also
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 higher, at about £200,000 compared with nearly £140,000 in the
UK
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. Ranking the categories, the
UK
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’s expenditure fell from
cars
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 to
books
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,
cameras
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,
computers
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 and
then
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perfume
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,
whereas
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 in
France
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 the order was
cars
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first,
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followed by
computers
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,
books
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,
perfume
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 and,
lastly
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,
cameras
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, uk, computers, books, perfume, cars, cameras with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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