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Band 4

A university education is becoming more expensive every year and the money paid for a degree can keep university graduates in debt for years. Therefore, tuition fees should be abolished, and governments should pay for university education. To what extent do you agree with this viewpoint?

whether
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 authorities should provide funds for tertiary
education
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 has become one of the most debatable
topic
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. With the rise in inflation,
tution
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tuition
 fees of most universities have
also
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 increased, which most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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students
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 can not afford.
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, many
students
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 do not
conitnue
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continue
 their
education
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further
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.
In
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From
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 my perspective, authorities should pay for tertiary
education
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 to motivate those
students
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 who have
potential
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the potential
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 to study
further
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, it has been noted, many learners who end their college with excellent grades are forced to leave their
education
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 and are directed to find employment. The
government
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 can play an important role in identifying those
students
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 who pass their college with good grades and show potential for
further
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education
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 to provide
scholorship
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scholarships
 for
further
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education
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.
This
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 will not only increase the literacy rate, but it will
also
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 provide the society with
most
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the most
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 professional individuals like doctors, engineers and scientists. The
pakistan
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Pakistani
government
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 has recently taken an initiative to provide funds for public universities that allow
students
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 to get free
education
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 at
university
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the university
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 level.
This
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 encouraged the
studnets
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students
 to study hard in their
respected
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respective
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 professions and produced better results. The other advantage of using
government
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 money on tertiary
education
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 is to encourage
students
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 to stay in their country who travel abroad for
further
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education
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 To
summerize
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summarise
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, every student
deserve
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deserves
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 to study in
university
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a university
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The
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government
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 should encourage them by providing either
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a scholorship
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scholorship
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scholarship
 or free access to universities so that
qualified
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a qualified
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 and professional society can be created

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task response
State your view in the intro in one line and restate it in the end. In the body, add 2 or 3 main ideas and explain them with simple facts.
coherence
Make each main idea into its own paragraph. Start with a clear topic sentence and use small linking words to connect ideas.
grammar
Fix spelling and grammar. Use simple, common words. Check spellings like tuition, scholarship, and government.
content
Give more real examples and explain how they back your point.
task response
You show a clear view that the government should help education.
content
You use an example about Pakistan to back a point.
structure
The plan of using money for scholarships or free access is clear.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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