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The line graph below shows the percentage of people who used five different communication methods between 1998 and 2008

The line graph below shows the percentage of people who used five different communication methods between 1998 and 2008
The line graph illustrates the percentage of people using 5 types of communication
services
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, namely
landline
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,
internet
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, mobile
broadband
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, cellular phone,
fixed
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and fixed
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broadband
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, over the period from 1998 to 2008.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the use of cellular phones and
internet
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services
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 rose significantly,
while
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landline
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 usage remained relatively stable. Meanwhile, both fixed and mobile
broadband
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 appeared only in the later
years
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 and showed gradual growth. In 1998,
landline
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 service was the most commonly used, at around 14%, followed by cellular phones , about 5% and
internet
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services
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 , around 3%. Over the
years
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, cellular phone usage experienced the sharpest increase, rising dramatically to more than 60% in 2008, making it the most popular communication method.
Internet
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services
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also
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 increased steadily, reaching about 22% by the end of the period.
By contrast
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,
landline
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 service grew slightly in the early
years
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, peaking at around 20% in 2006, before declining marginally to 19% in 2008. Fixed
broadband
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 and mobile
broadband
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 appeared after 2002 and 2004, respectively.
Although
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 their usage remained below 10%, both showed an upward trend, reaching around 6% by 2008. In summary, cellular phone and
internet
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services
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 became increasingly dominant,
while
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 traditional
landline
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 use showed signs of decline.
Broadband
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services
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, though less common, showed potential growth in the
last
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years
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words services, landline, internet, broadband, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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