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Cultural traditions are important in many societies. To what extent do you think maintaining cultural traditions is important in a globalized world? What other measures can be taken to preserve cultural heritage?

Many
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 believe that cultural traditions are crucial
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 in my view, it is essential to maintain them at any cost, and preserving them fosters diversity , which makes life interesting. There are many effective steps that we can take to keep
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 beneficial inheritance.
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 with,
people
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 who live in different countries have different traditions, and
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 diversity inspires
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 to be tourists in order to see new rituals, religions, and
food
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, many foreigners visit Turkey every year with the intent to eat their traditional
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 because Turkey spends so much money maintaining its cultural heritage,
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. After I was suggested to visit Turkey,
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 year I travelled to it to try their traditional
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 called Pizza.
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 , as we know, when
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 travel and do not stay in their country, it increases the circulation of money , which can create plenty of opportunities for many
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 .
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 , if we do not preserve our cultural heritage,
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 may not tend to move to another country , which can have a pernicious effect on our economy. In order to preserve the cultural legacy, we need to implement a few strategies.
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 to hold workshops and teach
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 the importance of cultural differences.
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 , it is significant to create a group of young
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 who are supposed to raise the awareness of the negative consequences that we can receive if we blissfully ignore
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 and
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do not follow the steps.
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 , keeping our distinct heritage in
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 hands is inevitable, since it improves our lives by creating jobs, and in a bid to do that, we should tell
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 its importance.

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clarity
Tell your view on how much traditions matter in the start. Then write the body with clear steps and proof.
structure
Have a plan in the first paragraph. Each paragraph should have one main idea.
accuracy
Be careful with facts. Use clear and real examples and avoid wrong or unclear facts.
analysis
Try to show both sides. Say good and bad of keeping traditions in a global world.
linking
Link ideas with simple words like also, but, then, for example to keep flow.
strength
Idea that culture can be a large part of life and help travel.
strength
There is a plan to keep heritage by steps.
strength
The task is started and some proof is given.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • globalization
  • preservation
  • identity
  • uniqueness
  • intergenerational transmission
  • tourism
  • homogenization
  • adaptation
  • evolution
  • awareness
  • community
  • continuity
  • tradition
  • cultural practices
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