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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter • suggest how you could help her in her home • say why you would like to do this work • explain when you will and will not be available

Dear Mrs Barrett, I am Sophie, a female, a local university student
of
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 Vancouver. I have noticed that you need a home
assistent
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assistant
 next Summer
from
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 a post. I would like to undertake
this
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 work, I am able to clean the carpet, mow the
laon
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lawn
, and cook a
veariety
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variety
 of cuisines,
as well as
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babysitter
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. You may wonder how
could I
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I could
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 be so
a
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all-around a
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all-round
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apply
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houseworker. I am learning hotel management
in
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at
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 BCIT, the tutors of which encourage us to practice
more
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apply
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as
possible as
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 we can.
In addition
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 to my
tatlent
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talent
 of
geting
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getting
along with
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 kids, I am the perfect candidate for your
need
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needs
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. Your offer is next Summer, during the time
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 I am on Summer
hodilday
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holiday
so
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, so
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 I would rather
to
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render service from 6 p.m. - 10 p.m. on Monday,
Wesday
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Wednesday
, and Friday, and I am off work on
weekend
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weekends
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. Anyway, if you have
specific
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 timetable, we can
disscuss
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discuss
 it later. I am keen to meet you, have a nice day
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my
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my best wishes, Sophie

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grammar
Spell and cap words right. Fix wrong spellings like 'assist ent', 'hodilday', and 'laon'.
lexis
Use simple and common words. Some phrases are long; break them into short parts.
punctuation
Put commas and full stops in the right place. Start each sentence with a capital letter.
structure
Make three clear parts: what you can do, why you want the work, and when you are free. Use a short new paragraph for each part.
tone
Be polite in tone. Do not say you are perfect. Use 'you' and 'I' in a respectful way.
content
You tell what jobs you can do.
content
You give the days and hours you can work.
style
The letter starts with Dear and ends with a closing.
content
You say you are in summer holiday, so time fits.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Domestic chores
  • Culinary skills
  • Horticulture
  • Cultural immersion
  • Work ethic
  • Flexible schedule
  • Time management
  • Prior commitments
  • Punctuality
  • Reliability
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