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You will go to a foreign country to stay there for one year, and you need a place to live in. You have decided to write to an agency for accommodation. Write a letter to the agency to get information about accommodation. In your letter, say: why you are going to this country what kind of accommodation you want when you will arrive You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir / Madam, I am writing
this
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the
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information about the residence in Central London. I will be travelling to my destination next weekend, for
that
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I want you to let me know about any residency available. I will be staying there for one year because I have got the
scholarshipin
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scholarship
 post-graduate in
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University
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the University
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 of Central London.
Moreover
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, I would like to mention that I will be attending the
university
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 twice a week, so in order to meet
the
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both ends
meet
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, I will work as a waitress in any restaurant, keeping in mind
,
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 my past experience. As
,
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 I am alone,
so
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I only need a single room
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 it could be a shared apartment.
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,
It
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 would be a good option for me
,
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 if you provide the
accomodation
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accommodation
in
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between the
university
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 and the food court
which
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, which
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 enables me to connect with
job
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a job
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 after
university
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 to mitigate any time issue. I will be looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Nimra Pervaiz

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organization
Work on a clear structure. Use one paragraph for the aim, a second for details about stay and plan, and a short closing paragraph.
grammar
Check grammar and word choice. Words like 'residence' and 'accommodation' are similar; watch spelling and form.
content
Be concise. Keep to key points and avoid extra ideas unless they help your request.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas fit together and keep a smooth flow from purpose to plan to arrival.
tone
Polite tone with a formal opening and closing.
content
State of arrival and length of stay is clear.
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