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Band 3

Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Quite a few folks are in favour of having adventures,
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 others prefer staying where they originally are. It
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's
 regardless of right or wrong, but different personalities. The crowd who intends to expand their
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horizon
, are curious about the world.
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, babies always want to try things they
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experience
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 before, because of their
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intuitive
 desire to learn, to have fun.
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 the
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young
, some seniors
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 have curiosity, so some of them choose to
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travel
 around the world, some of them opt to continue learning
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such
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, such
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 as dancing,
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painting
, gardening, and
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scientific
 projects, etc. What I have to say,
curotity
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curiosity
 is a
stength
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strength
, which
progress
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progresses
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 the world into
civilization
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.
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, there are
also
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 peers who would rather live
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in
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 stable conditions
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and may
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 search for a sense of safety. I assume that everyone is distinctive
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 others, even
they
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if they
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 are
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siblings
 sharing
same
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the same
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 blood. Taking my family as an example, unlike me, my younger brother was afraid of leaving his
homtown
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hometown
 since 5 years old, and he didn't have any ambitions to
acheieve
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achieve
 a certain education or career. All he
expect
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expects
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 is living with parents forever and keeping an
unsotisphicated
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unsatisfactory
 lifestyle. I believe that he
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 to be protected and risk-free congenitally.
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, opting to change or stay
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the same
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 is a matter of
characters
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character
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. Perhaps someone is born to be
explorters
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an extrovert
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,
wherease
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whereas
 someone is ingeniously shy and
conservtive
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conservative
.

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planning
Plan what you want to say. Start with your view in one clear line, then add two sides and finish with a short end.
grammar
Use simple, correct sentences. Check spellings and word form.
coherence
Link ideas with easy words like first, next, also, but, for example.
content
Give one clear example for each point and stay close to the main idea.
content
You show both sides and give your own view.
content
You use real life ideas (baby, old people) as examples.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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