IELTS Topics: Number 8. Some think that teenagers should follow older people’s rules. Others thinks that it is natural for them to challenge what older people say. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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humans, the young have challenged the beliefs of older
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they want to share their wisdom. The question remains if young
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should follow older
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’s rules or go after their natural instinct to go their own way. On the one hand, the older generations have a lot of wisdom and life experience to judge certain situations better. Knowing how to handle a situation out
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experience can prevent failure and support the outcome. If
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knowledge is shared, young individuals can learn and alter the outcome of new situations by adapting to what they
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.
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, generational knowledge can be improved upon by generations to come.
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can be applied to many technologies nowadays.
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, planes made out of paper
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leaving the ground
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go between continents.
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, old
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often have a hard time letting go of what they know, even when it is not beneficial anymore.
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, many older construction workers tend to use their hand tools
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of machinery.
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is mostly owed to pride and inacceptance of being wrong.
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, if young
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do not challenge old rules, it can have the opposite effect and lead technology to a standstill. In conclusion,
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it is often useful to learn from older
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, following them blindly can have its drawbacks and doubting someone can
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lead to improvement. I firmly believe young
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should listen to the older generations, but
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ask themselves if they don’t want to make their own experiences as well.

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coherence
Explain more on each point. Add a clear link between ideas to show how one thought leads to another.
task
Pick one or two strong examples and explain why they show your view.
language
Check phrasing and grammar so the idea is easy to read and less to guess.
structure
The essay has a clear plan: introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
content
It shows both sides and gives a view of the writer.
examples
Some examples are used to back ideas.

Your opinion

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