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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.(n)

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.(n)
The graph provides information about the number of
books
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 that were borrowed from four different village libraries, West Eaton, Rye Slip, Sutton Wood and Church Mount from June to September in 2014. The pie chart illustrates the distribution of those
books
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according to
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 five different fields.
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, it is obvious that Sutton Wood experienced significant growth,
while
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 Rye Slip halved during the given time period. There is a similar slow pace in the book loans from both West Eaton and Church Mount libraries , and almost half of those
books
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 are about fiction
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,
although
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 in June the highest number of
books
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 borrowed was from Rye slip , and those figures halved , Sutton Wood experienced a dramatic growth starting from August and ended up as the most borrowed village library with the number of 300. One-fifth of borrowed
books
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 are written about biography.
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, there is a similar trend in the issue of
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 from West Eaton and Church Mount libraries , and they both borrowed 150
books
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for
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by
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 the end of September.
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, the least interested category of
books
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 in that period was self-help , with a portion of one-tenth of the total.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 65%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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