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Write a letter to a friend to ask him/her to develop a website for your business. •In your letter: Give a brief description of the business : •Mention what you'd like to be there on the website. •Provide some ideas on the use of images on the website :

Dear
sumi
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, Hope
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 letter finds you in
rediant
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radiant
 health and best of spirits.
May be
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 you know
i
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I
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start
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started
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bussines
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business
last
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 year in
june
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June
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 about makeup artist
and
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apply
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me and my sister are working on that.In my
shop
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shop,
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 we do make up for
bride
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the bride
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 and any party
make up
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make-up
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.People are
likeing
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liking
 our work and they
appriceat
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appreciate
 our work.I
highly
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am highly
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 indebted to my friends and family who support me a lot. I
shoud
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should
you
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to
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apply
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creat
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create
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one
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a
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 website for my small business.
In
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this
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website
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website,
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 we will make my shop
photos
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apply
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. We
creat
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created
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one
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a
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time
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one-time
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manue
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manual
 for my customer who
want
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wants
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 to take
appointment
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an appointment
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 for their
make up
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make-up
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.I
aslo
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also
 put
price
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the price
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 list in
this
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to
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 all varieties.I hope you
understant
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understand
 my idea and we work for it.You can come to
place
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 and we will
finalizing
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 things. I would be very
greatful
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grateful
 if you
come
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could come
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 and take
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a photoghraph
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photoghraph
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photograph
to
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of
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 my shop.
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however
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However
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,
i
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I
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wil
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will
 give you
idea
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an idea
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 to use
image
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the image
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 and when we use
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it in
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in
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 the website. I hope you
would
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will
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 understand my idea
for
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further
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details
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detail
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 we will meet soon. For my
contact
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i
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 will give you my phone number
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this
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 is my email
id
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 for contact. Hopeing to hear from you soon! your lovingly, Tithi

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structure
Break the letter into short parts. Start with a clear aim, then talk about the business, what you want on the site, and how images will be used.
structure
Make each paragraph hold one idea only. The first paragraph can say who you are and why you write. The next parts can list the site needs and the image idea.
language
Use easy and correct spelling. Keep to simple words so your point is clear.
tone
Use a normal closing and a friendly tone, to show you are polite and sure.
content
The letter shows a kind and warm tone.
content
It mentions clear goals for the site, such as photos and a price list.
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