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Band 4

Nowadays many people choose to be self employed, rather than to work for company or organization

In the developing nations, the number of
the
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individuals
increasing
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is increasing
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,
who’s
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whose
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mind
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minds
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started
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have started
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 to develop different ideas and views. In
modern
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the modern
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 world, there are a lot of young
professionals
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 and
techical
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technical
 workers who prefer to be
self employed
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self-employed
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 or
freelancer
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freelancers
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instead
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 of
permanent
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a permanent
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 9
to
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5 job. They prefer to
work
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free
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for free
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instead
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under
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of under
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a
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an
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organization
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organisation
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 or a company. On one side of the argument.
This
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 change can result
a
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major evolution in human working
habbits
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habits
.
Now a days
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Nowadays
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, there are many
plateforms
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platforms
 on the internet that offer young generations and
professions
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professionals
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 to
work
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 freely without any
restriction
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restrictions
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 and rules.
While
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,
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this
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trend
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 offers
fexible
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flexible
 hours to
work
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 and high pay.
Furthermore
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 young generation
feel
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feels
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 comfortable
to
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working
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work
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 on these
plateforms
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platforms
instead
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 of working with a company with
bundle
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a bundle
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 of restrictions and rules.
For instance
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, Fiver and Upwork are the online
plateforms
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platforms
,
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apply
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 that
offers
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offer
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professionals
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 to just make a Gig, like
open
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opening
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 a shop in the Fiver market. After that, a client
send
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sends
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 you a
work
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according to
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 your skills,
then
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 you can do
this
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work
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any time
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anytime
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 without
under
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being under
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 the company.
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,
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this
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 change seems to be perfect,
but
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it
also
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 has some drawbacks. By working
free
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for free
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 in the market, you may have
less order
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fewer orders
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 or
opportunity
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opportunities
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 to
work
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,
that
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which
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 may cause financial issues.
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, freelancers do not have the ability to bear the load of
work
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 as compared to the hired
professionals
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,
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;
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additionally
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,
this
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trend
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 will divert society towards less social. In a practical life,
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Boston University
made
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conducted
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a
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reasearch
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research
 about the contrast between freelancers and the
hiered
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hired
 people. They find that the freelancers are
les
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less
 social than the hired people. In conclusion,
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Although
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although
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this
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trend
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rising
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is rising
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 in
the
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society,
but
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there are
also
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 some
professionals
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 who do not prefer it.
This
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trend
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 would be more common in the
coming
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future
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besides
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, besides
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 having disadvantages. In
generals
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general
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, it is recommended
to
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apply
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the
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companies that
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that companies
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 they should provide more facilities to
the
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employees to oppose
this
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 change.

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structure
Make a clear plan before you write. Start with a short intro, then 3 body parts, then a short conclusion.
grammar
Use short, simple sentences. Check basic grammar and spelling to fix big errors.
content
Give one main view and keep to it. Use 1 or 2 good examples that fit your idea.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like 'also', 'but', 'however' to show how ideas fit.
idea
The essay has good ideas about self work and the use of online platforms.
example
You name online markets like Upwork and Fiverr, which fits the topic.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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