Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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like social media platforms have a negative impact on people's social lives, I believe that modern ways of interaction can be useful for
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social life if used correctly. At the outset, many people spend a significant amount of
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on the Internet, and they rarely interact with other
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consequently
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, individuals
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going to be more isolated from their own society.
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will lead to a detrimental impact on
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' social life.
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, allocating significant
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online
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activities will
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lead to
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an increase
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sense of loneliness, and
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is going to increase psychological diseases. To give an illustration, in 1975, police caught the
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criminal
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he was committing a crime, and he said that the reason for his actions
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due to
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the
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sense of loneliness. In sharp contrast to
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, social media platforms have proved to be an effective way to communicate with people. The reason for
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is
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that modern
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means of communication
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available at any place and
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a low cost.
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,
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people
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going to have a huge chance to get in touch with each
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, in the past,
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needed a substantial amount of
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to reach to other
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, but nowadays human beings can reach
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each other in no
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, even though tools of communication
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as Facebook can have drawbacks on social life if used in
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way, if
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utilized
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these tools
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can benefit their interaction with other human beings.

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task response
State your view clearly in the first paragraph and keep one main stance throughout.
structure
Plan your essay with three parts: intro, body, and conclusion. Each body should have one main idea and its reason.
coherence
Give two or three clear points. Each point should be simple and supported by a reason.
coherence
End with a short conclusion that restates your view.
examples
Use true, simple examples that fit the point. Avoid wrong names or facts.
content
You try to discuss both sides of the issue.
style
There are some linking words to join ideas.
topic
The topic of ease of talk and time is clear.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern forms of communication
  • email
  • messaging
  • reduce
  • amount of time
  • see friends
  • social lives
  • technology
  • communication
  • faster
  • convenient
  • stay in touch
  • connect
  • online
  • social media platforms
  • meet new people
  • face-to-face interactions
  • maintain relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • social isolation
  • digital communication
  • emotional depth
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