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The bar chart below shows the percentage of the population in th UK who consumed the recommended daily amout of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010

The bar chart below shows the percentage of the population in th UK who consumed the recommended daily amout of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010
The charts
gives
Correct subject-verb agreement
give
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 information about the shares of people who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.
Overall
Linking Words
, throughout the
period
Punctuation problem
period,
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 the shares of individuals consumed
daily
Correct article usage
the daily
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 amount of
required
Correct article usage
the required
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 type of food fluctuated, but 2006 was the year
,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 when people consumed healthy food, reached
to
Change preposition
apply
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a high point of proportion. The groups are made of men and
women
Punctuation problem
women,
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 saw a twentieth of the total in
2002
Punctuation problem
2002,
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 each, and all increased by around 6%. In 2010, both fell back to just over
Correct article usage
the
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levels in 2002.
Moreover
Linking Words
,
share
Correct article usage
the share
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 of
childer
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children
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devoured
Correct pronoun usage
who devoured
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a
Correct article usage
apply
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healthy food
had
Verb problem
was
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 only 11%, and rose
till
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to
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 16% in 2006, until
fell
Correct pronoun usage
it fell
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 back to 14% by the end of the period.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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