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The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart below illustrates women’s unemployment percentages in
England
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,
Wales
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,
Scotland
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, and Northern
Ireland
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 in 2013 and 2014.
Overall
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,
Scotland
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's female unemployment increased, unlike the other 3
countries
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, whose rates have declined. The other significant feature of
this
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 graph is that Northern
Ireland
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 has the highest reduction of the four
countries
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. In detail,
England
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 had a proportion of joblessness among women of 6.8% in 2013, more than
Scotland
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 by 0.7%, which only had a ratio of 6.1%.
Scotland
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's level was higher than the lowest country in 2013 by 0.7%, namely
Wales
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, which only had a share of 5.4%.
Finally
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, the Northern
Ireland
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 figure was 5.6%.
In contrast
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 to all other
countries
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,
Scotland
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's female unemployment rate increased to 6.7% in 2014, making it the highest among the four
countries
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.
England
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's and
Wales
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' incidence declined to 6.5% and 5.0%, respectively.
However
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, Northern
Ireland
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 made a significant change by reducing their ratio of unemployed females from 5.6% to 4.6% in only a year, which is more than the decline of
Wales
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 and
England
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Vocabulary: Replace the words england, wales, scotland, ireland, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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