The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to Japan for different purposes between 1990 and 2010.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to Japan for different purposes between 1990 and 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to Japan for different purposes between 1990 and 2010.
The line graph indicates the number of foreign tourists who
traveled
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travelled
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to Japan for three different reasons
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such
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, such
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as
business
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,holiday and
visit
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visiting
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friends
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from
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, from
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1990 to 2010.
It is clear that
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,
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apply
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business
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was by far the most important tourist
'
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apply
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intention in 1990.Visiting
friends
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provided the lowest number in 1990. Visiting
friends
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was less than 4% in 1990
which
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, which
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displayed a negligible number of visitors.
By contrast
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, holiday and
business
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had the highest proportion of explorers with almost 6% and 6.2% respectively.
Business
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was steady from 1990 to 1995,
then
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rose dramatically in 2000 and collapsed in 2005 before reaching
to
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a peak
at the end
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of 2010.Holiday had an erratic trend over the period and rose and fell from 1990 to 2010. Visiting
friends
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was fairly steady until 2005 before falling significantly by 2010.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words business, friends with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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