The charts below give information about workplace injuries in one country in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about workplace injuries in one country in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below give information about workplace injuries in one country in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given graph compares the
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of ages of people injured in the 4 types of workplaces
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in one country
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in 2018.
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,
while
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there is no clear trend connected to age, there are some
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similarities
, with the
lder
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older
generation that are more vulnerable to injuries at work, and
workers
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at their 25-34 are less
liikely
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likely
to be affected.
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with, in education and health and mining and construction employers
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are 25-to 34-years-old generally got
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inguries
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injuries
at the
workplaces
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workplace
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compared to other age categories, at 5% and 10%, respectively. The
percentage
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of
workers
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at 15-24 and 50-60+ years old are more vulnerable to be affected by the
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injuries
, though
workers
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at their 50-60 striked more
inguries
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injuries
in the education and
helth
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health
workplace (40%), similar patterns were
striked
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struck
in mining and construction, where teenagers are mostly injured.
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, in the leisure and hospitality,
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manufacturing
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is the
workers
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at 35-49
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who were more injured at 30% and 35%, respectively. In leisure and hospitality
workplaces
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workplaces,
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employees around 12% of the youngest category were injured, and 38% in the oldest. In manufacturing, the
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injuries
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among
younger
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the younger
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population slightly increased, with 15% aged 15 to 24 and 25% in the 25 to 34 group.
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, at 35-49
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workers
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reached 35% in getting injuries, and the
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of 50-60-year-olds
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similar to
workers
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at 25 to 34 years (50%).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, workers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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