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Band 2

Scientists have been warning for many years about protecting the environment and that people must limit the use of energy in their daily lives. Despite warnings, many people do not do so. What are the reasons for this and how can people be encouraged to protect the environment?

People have been warned
of
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that
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protection
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protecting
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 the environment and
daily
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limiting daily
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 energy use should be
limited
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a priority
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.
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, the public ignores the warnings. In
this
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essay
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 I will explore the reasons
of
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for
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 inaction and provide suggested solutions that would motivate individuals to protect
the
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apply
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Mother Earth. One major reason for the lack of environmental illiteracy
lays
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 in the mentality of the nation. Many people simply have no care about the environment.
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, sightings of throwing garbage wherever they want
is
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 a guaranteed spot.
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, almost all countries do not
select
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sort
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 the waste before
getting rid
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disposing
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 of
.
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 To encourage environmental protection, people should stop being irresponsible and start to obtain new habitats
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such
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, such
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 as not littering everywhere, and at least
utilize
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utilise
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 their tampons and diapers.
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, being in charge
for
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 the actions being done
in
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on
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daily
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a daily
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 basis and awareness of actions are key reasons to prevent the earth
damage
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apply
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. Through education, and
a
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the
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 right way of child
rise
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raising
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, individuals can be guided
towar desicions
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towards decisions
 that are
eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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.

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structure
Explain your main idea in a clear plan. Start with a small thesis and give 2 or 3 ideas with a short example.
organization
Plan before you write. Use four parts: intro, body, and conclusion.
grammar
Use easy grammar and common words. Check mistakes and avoid long or hard phrases.
content
Give small real examples to show how actions can help the environment.
content
The writer tries to answer the task with some plan.
structure
There is a clear end sentence and a closing idea.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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