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The map show a change of coastal town, called Petland, from 1950 to 2007

The map show a change of coastal town, called Petland, from 1950 to 2007
The maps
demonstrates
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 the development that happened in
coastal
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the coastal
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town
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, namely Petland
between
Punctuation problem
, between
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 1950 and 2007.
At
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In
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 the year
of
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apply
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1950, the
town
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is
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was
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 basic. There was a main intersection at the centre of the
town
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 and a sea in the
northen
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northern
. Following the
road
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 from the sea,
industrial
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the industrial
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 area was located
in
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to
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 the west of the
road
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.
Contrastly
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Contrastingly
,
at
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in
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 the east, people could
park
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 their car
at
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in
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 the car
park
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. In the southeast, there
Linking Words
also was
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was also
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 a grassland. In
the
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2005, the city was altered considerably. In the
northen
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north
, the main development that
occured
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occurred
 was the
transform
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 the yacht marina,
together with
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 a
road
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 around the yacht and new apartments
at
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to
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 the east. In the northwest side,
industrial
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the industrial
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 area was gone and in its place became
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a multi
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multi storey
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multi-storey
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 car
park
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, with
new
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a new
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park
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 near the
yarcht
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yacht
 and
new
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a new
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 swimming pool.
Also
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,
along side
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alongside
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of
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apply
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the intersection, there was
installation
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an installation
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 of shops. For the
sounthen
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southern
 part of the
road
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,
while
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former
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the former
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 grassland was demolished and
repalced
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replaced
 with
residencial
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residential
 houses.
the
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On the
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opposit
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opposite
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 side
the
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of the
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 venue was
a
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an
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 introduction
of
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to
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 a cinema.
Overall
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, the Petland
town
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 was urbanisation
which
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, which
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 became more habitable and more
entertainment
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entertaining
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, road, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • coast
  • beach
  • town
  • harbor
  • road
  • house
  • houses
  • shop
  • shops
  • park
  • field
  • farm
  • water
  • map
  • year
  • grow
  • build
  • built
  • change
  • expand
  • develop
  • replace
  • new
  • old
  • more
  • less
  • along
  • near
  • center
  • edge
  • fishing
  • tourists
  • people
  • area
  • land
  • sea
  • bay
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