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You have lost your student identification card. This has created some problems for you. Write a letter to the director of student services. In your letter -advising them of your situation. -explain how this is affecting you. -request a new card. give me bands and oiginal photo transcript

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to you in regards to my student identification
card
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which
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, which
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 I lost recently. I am Esther Osei Duah,a biomedical laboratory science student with an Identification number ps/mlb/25.
Unfortunately
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Unfortunately,
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 I lost my ID
card
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couple
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a couple
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 of weeks ago
in
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on
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 a bus
and
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, and
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this
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 has created a lot of problems for me.I am denied access to
bored
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board
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 a shuttle,visiting the library and even entry to the Information
communication technology
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 lab without a student ID.
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,I am not allowed to write exams or take quizzes without showing my
Students
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student
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card
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This
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 has gone a long way to affect my
affect
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apply
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performance since I am not able to use the school library.I was expected to write a resit for my chemical pathology course
which
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, which
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 I failed
last
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 semester
but
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, but
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 because I had no
prove
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proof
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 of
identification
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identification,
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 I was not allowed entry to the
exams
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exam
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 hall.
Due to
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this
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,my professor has cautioned me that if I do not get a new
card
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 by the end of the semester,I
would
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will
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 be
repeated
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dropped
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 or dismissed from school. I would be glad
to
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apply
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if you could help me with a new
card
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 before the end of
this
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 semester.
This
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 will help me resit for all my failed exams and will
also
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 help me use the library to study. I hope you hear from you soon Yours faithfully Esther Osei

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structure
Break the letter into clear parts: intro, problem, effect, and request. Use one idea per paragraph.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling. Use simple, correct phrases and standard spelling (e.g., 'board a shuttle', 'proof', 'exam hall').
coherence
Keep sentences short and use linking words to show flow (because, also, therefore).
tone
Formal tone is kept with 'Dear Sir' and 'Yours faithfully'.
task response
The letter states the problem and asks for a new card clearly.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • lost
  • card
  • ID
  • student
  • campus
  • buildings
  • library
  • books
  • meal
  • plan
  • enter
  • classes
  • exams
  • problem
  • daily
  • life
  • now
  • please
  • help
  • new
  • card
  • temporary
  • card
  • what
  • bring
  • papers
  • proof
  • name
  • date
  • contact
  • email
  • phone
  • thank
  • you
  • sincerely
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