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Band 4.5

Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying products (such as cellphones) or services (medical treatments) do you agree or disagree?

Many
people
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 think cost
is play
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plays
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 a crucial role when they have
intention
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the intention
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 to purchase merchandise. I partly agree with
this
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 statement, on account of
other
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another
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 reason
which
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, which
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 is
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quality
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the quality
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 of goods
and
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, and
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i
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 would like to discuss in
this
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 essay.
One
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 the one hand, some
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people
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people,
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 particularly the weaker part of
society
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society,
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 are taking into account to buy something that would not be expensive so that they cannot afford to purchase
products
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 which are not affordable.
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, many
people
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 of
this
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 community prefer buying second-hand
products
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 because it costs them more
and
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, and
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 they actually save more money
and
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, and
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 many of them are fans of buying
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 sort of
things
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thing
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and
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, and
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 it can be everything , from clothes to furniture.There are many websites available in some countries
that
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where
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 these
products
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 are offered
by
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apply
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them
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apply
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and
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also
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are also
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they
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apply
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accesible
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accessible
.
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, demand should not be an important factor for
people
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 . Because the most substantial category is
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quality
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the quality
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 of goods. It is commonly believed
the
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that the
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 higher
investment
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the investment
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on
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in
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products
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, the
more
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higher
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quality
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the quality
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are
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apply
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, which is wholly wrong. To give a clear exam, if an individual desires to buy clothes , they have to
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consider
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 several factors
such
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 as material, texture
as well
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as
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and
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 fabric.
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, there are many goods
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that exists
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exists
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exist
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 with
low
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a low
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 amount of money but they have perfect
quality
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.
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Nevertheless
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Nevertheless,
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this
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 can happen
vise
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vice
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 versa. In conclusion, price can play
main
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a main
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 factor
but
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, but
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 in some
cases
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cases,
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quality
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 speaks first and must not be overlooked
from
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in
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 our purpose of shopping.

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grammar
Improve grammar and sentence form to be clearer and more correct.
task response
Make your position clear in the first paragraph and keep it throughout the essay.
coherence
Use simple connect words to show order of ideas, like first, next, and finally.
examples
Give more specific examples that relate directly to price and quality with short facts.
content
You show a real attempt to discuss both price and quality.
structure
There is a basic structure with intro, body, and conclusion.
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