The bar charts show the percentages of film release and ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 (romance, drama, comedy, fantasy)

The pair of bar charts

provide

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information about the distribution of film

production

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and the ticket

sales

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percentages for four genres, drama,

comedy

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, fantasy and

romance

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comparing

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, comparing

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data between 1996 and 2000.

Overall

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, drama and

comedy

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films accounted for the highest shares of both release and

tickets

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ticket

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sales

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while

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romance

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consistently recorded the lowest percentages. Drama was the most prevalent genre , making up about 27% in 1996 and rising to 35% in 2000.

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While

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Comedy

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comedy

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also

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increased from 20% to roughly 25%. Fantasy

flims

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films

showed an upward movement, grew from 11% in 1996 to nearly 16% in 2000.

Romance

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stayed at the lowest level of

production

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, accounting for less than 10% of total

release

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releases

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in both surveyed years. Indicating a gap between

production

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and audience demand.

Comedy

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was the most popular genre , with

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ticket sales

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rising

tickets

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from 20% in 1996 to 23% in 2000. Fantasy,

thought

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though

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relatively fewer in

production

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, saw their

tickets

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ticket

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sales

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went

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up from 3% in 1996 to around 8% in 2000, showing a growing audience interest.

Romance

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sales

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fell slightly, dropping from about 5% in 1996 to just 2% in 2000.

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Aug 31, 2025

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, sales, comedy, romance with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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