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Writing Samples
Band 2

Some people think that rich countries should support poor countries in terms of aid for health care and education. To what extend do you agree?

Many people believe that rich
countries
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 should support poor
countries
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 in terms of aid for health care and
eduction
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education
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. I completely agree with
this
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 view and will explain my reasons below . One reason why
i
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I
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 agree that all
walthy
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wealthy
countries
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 must help poor
countries
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 is that 30% of
newborn
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newborns
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 in Africa
are dead
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die
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 because of
,
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apply
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 malnutrition and lack of milk .
For example
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 : 3500
child
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children
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 in Sudan
annulay
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annually
is
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are
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 dead because of
lack
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a lack
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 of vaccination .
This
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 clearly shows that medicine is
very
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a very
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 important thing for
third world
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third-world
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countries
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 .
Anthor
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Another
 reason is that the world is like a small village , every problem
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that happen
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happen
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happens
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 in the first house will
affects
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affect
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 the next house .
In addition
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 , Education is
common
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a common
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 right for each human .
Therefore
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 ,
We
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we
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 need to
bulid
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build
 a world witch all people
could
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can
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 live a
happy
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happy,
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 safe life .
in
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In
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 conclusion ,I firmly believe that health and education
is
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apply
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must be provided properly in all
countries
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 to make life better .

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structure
Plan your essay before writing. Use one idea per paragraph. Start with a short intro that states your view, then two or three reasons with examples, then a short conclusion.
coherence
Use linking words to connect ideas. Use words like First, Also, For example, Therefore, However.
factual accuracy
Check facts and spellings. Use real and accurate data. Keep numbers small and correct.
language accuracy
Fix grammar and sentence form. Use simple, clear sentences.
stance
You show a clear view that aid is needed.
content
You touch the link between health, education and life quality.
language
You use simple language at some points.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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