Houses are essential for people. Some people think that the government should offer free houses for people who cannot afford to pay for it. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

There is no denying the fact that Houses make
familys
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families
.
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it is a commonly held
belife
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belief
that homes are important for
humun
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humans
. Some
people
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think that the country should offer free homes for
people
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who cannot afford to pay for
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them
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, there is
also
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an
argment
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argument
that
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opposes
it. In my
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opinion
, l consider that Houses it is
way
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the way
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to
better
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a better
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life.
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with , the government should help
people
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beucome
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become
not
have
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to have
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any
mony
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money
and cannot make a successful
also
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strong family. In other
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words
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, when
government
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the government
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help become a little homeless and
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improves
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the live
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live
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more
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of more
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person
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people
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.
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, Saudi Arabia gift a lot more free homes if
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they
have
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a low
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salary .
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other
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point to consider
,
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is, affects
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affects
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the
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country
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economy . It is
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possible to say that more
people
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donot
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do not
have any Houses.
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, now
man
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men
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and
wonen
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women
leaf
job
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jobs
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and stay in
street
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the street
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for
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to
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teke
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take
free
home
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.
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, there is
study
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a study
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that say
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say
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says
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99%
from
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of
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gift
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receive
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free
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a free
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home
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for
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from the government
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people
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. I conclusion , despite
people
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having different
view
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views
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,
l
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I
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believe that in
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the home
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home
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home,
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make memories ,happy moments
and
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, and
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feel safe with
children
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children,
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so
suggest
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I suggest
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give
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giving
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half
mony
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money
to buy
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home
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a home
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for
family
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the family
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if
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the country
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country
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country's
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economy is not helping.

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clarity
State clearly your view (agree or not) in the first part of the essay.
structure
Add 2 clear reasons and a short example for each reason.
language
Fix big spelling and grammar errors to help the reader.
cohesion
Use simple linking words like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'however' to show how ideas connect.
conclusion
End with a short, clear last sentence.
development
You try to share your view on the topic.
content
You bring up ideas about money and home.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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