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Percentage of government spending on road and transport (1990 - 2005)

The bar chart below shows the percentage of government spending on roads and transport in 4 countries in the years 1990, 1995, 2000,
2005
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, it is apparent that Portugal has the highest governmental spending on road and
transport
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transport,
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 the UK possesses the lowest statistics among the 4 countries. Specifically, Portugal’s government allocated more than a quarter of the total spending on transportation in 1990, which was about 5%
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percent
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cent
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 higher than the second-highest spender - Italy, with 22
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per cent
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.
Meanwhile
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 the UK and the USA’s expenditures were significantly lower at 10 and 11
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 respectively, which were 2.5 times lower than that of Portugal. Regarding the changes over the years, the figures of Portugal declined
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 over the 15-year period to exactly 20
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 in 2005. In comparison, the corresponding figures from Italy and the UK
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 displayed a general downward trend throughout the studied period
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 the exception of a short increase in 2000.
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, the expenditure figures of the USA demonstrated an upward trend , rising to 15
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 in 2005, despite dropping a minimal 1% in 1995.

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task response
Make sure you answer all parts of the task. In Task 1 you should give an overall view, then describe trends and the values for each year for all four countries.
grammar accuracy
Check numbers and be exact. Do not use vague phrases like 'more than a quarter' if you can give a clear number. Keep the data correct and tidy.
structure
Organize your text well. Use an intro, a clear overview, and at least one body paragraph for each idea. Try to add a short conclusion that sums up the main facts.
grammar
Use simple sentence forms and link words well. Do not join many ideas in long lines. Short lines are easier to read.
coherence
Use clear linking words to move from one idea to the next, e.g., first, next, then, however, in contrast.
content
The essay starts with a clear topic sentence and a broad view of the data.
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There is a steady attempt to compare the four countries and to give trend changes.
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The writer notes the year 2000 change and the rise of the USA, which shows some data use.

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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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