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Nowadays, people believe that the environment influences their accomplishments. Some people think their success and accomplishment were influenced by the places where they grew up. Do you think the environment does or does not affect people’s accomplishment and how it affects?

In modern contemporary
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has
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 been widespread discussions about
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environment
and
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 various explanations have been put forward. The number of
advodates
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advocates
 may strenuously argue that
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 biodiversity
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, their adversaries may claim
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that Conservation
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 helps keep different species safe.
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otherwise
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 the numerous arguments made,
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 money helps people meet their needs and provide evidence to support my opinion. There are a number of reasons why many individuals support
view
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 that Better public health.
first
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 and
foremost
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foremost,
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 a clean environment reduces pollution-related
diseasesIt
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diseases
 can
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to
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 sum up , because of these factors
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it is clear that
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 doubt
Environmental
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that Environmental
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 projects like renewable energy plants require large investments.
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 are several
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reasons why many people oppose the view that High costs of environmental projects
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 of all ,
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for
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 instance, installing solar panels can be costly for small towns. From my experience ,
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For
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for
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 example, installing solar farms can be expensive for developing countries.
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 of these
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 it is apparent that there are several benefits of In ConclusionWhile there are strong arguments on both sides of the case, my personal opinion is that Better public health
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would strongly recommend that. In conclusion,
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 both sides of the argument have their merits.
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, everything in life has pros and cons.
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, people should determine which way to choose.

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content
Make your view clear in the first paragraph. State yes or no and say how you think the env affects success.
structure
Use one idea per paragraph. Start with a topic sentence and end with a small note.
language
Keep to simple words. Avoid long and hard phrases. Check spelling and use proper grammar.
examples
Give one or two real examples. They should support your main point.
content
There is a clear effort to discuss the topic.
coherence
Some linking words are used to connect ideas.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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