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Writing Samples
Band 1

More and more people are turning towards fast food for their man meals. Do you think the advantages outweigh the c?

There's
alot
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a lot
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this
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 fast food for man's meals
huge
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 people are making their own advantages
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, following
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following
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with
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 disadvantages
people
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. People
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 will have to talk to the right person about what to eat
and
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 the opposite
not
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, not
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 eating
,
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 In
this
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article
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 we will be talking about evidence and
real
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the real
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 story of a guy who
excperienced
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experienced
 fast food meals. Quote
;
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:
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 My name is Hassan Asiri
,
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 My take about
this
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 topic is that people should definitely not be putting high
volume
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volumes
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 of fast food in their
mouth
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mouths
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due to
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 many reasons
2
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of them
is
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are
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 that they contain
a
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apply
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high
oils
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amounts
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on
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 them along to that some of them may not be clean
,
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also
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also,
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 the second reason is
thta
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that

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task
Be sure to answer the question. State clearly if the good side or the bad side wins, then end with a short yes or no conclusion.
coherence
Put ideas in order. Use small blocks or paragraphs: intro, 2 body parts (pros and cons), then a short ending.
development
Give a simple proof or example for each point, even if it is a small fact.
language
Fix spell and gram mistakes. Use short, plain sentences to lower work for readers.
coherence
Use link words to tie ideas: also, but, however, for example.
task
Clear opinion is shown in the text.
coherence
Some try to talk about both sides.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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