The chart below shows the number of people employed in five types of work in one region of Australia in 2001 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of people employed in five types of work in one region of Australia in 2001 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the number of people employed in five types of work in one region of Australia in 2001 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart
provide
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key information about the number of people working in five kinds of jobs in a part of Australia in 2001 and 2008.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
sales
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is
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the most perfect thing.
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,
sales
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and computing are the most successful in
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the graph
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,
whereas
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farming is the cheapest one.
Firstly
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,
according to
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the
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apply
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what is shown,
sales
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in 2001 and 2008 are always on top.
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moreover
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moreover,
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i
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I
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see that a decline from
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apply
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2001 to 2008
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apply
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. In seven
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years,
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the chart went down.
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also
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the accounting during 2001 and 2008 is slightly
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different.
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Finally
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,in
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of compared about
sales
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and farming,trade is higher than
farmers
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and farming is lower than
sales
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment trends
  • workforce
  • sector
  • industry
  • agriculture
  • services
  • economic factors
  • technological advancements
  • policy changes
  • notable increases/decreases
  • statistical data
  • regional employment patterns
  • comparative analysis
  • percentage points
  • employment rate
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