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Writing Samples
Band 2

Essay topics: In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction. What measures can be taken to prevent this?

I considered that the developing countries have some issues with the lowest level of
air
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 and
water
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 between industry and buildings. First and foremost,
straighting
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straightening
 the river can reduce
the
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apply
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water
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 pollution
and
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, and
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 the
water
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 can be clean. Since clear
water
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 can help us
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maintain mental
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mental our
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our mental
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 health, we need to reduce the
using
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use
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 of
water
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such
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, such
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 as bathing time.
Besides
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, we cannot throw away the drinks
such
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 as juice and soda drinks into the toilet because it may damage the
water
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 tube
and
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, and
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 when those drinks
push
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to
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into
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 the sea and ocean, our drinking
water
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become
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becomes
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 dirty.
Moreover
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, when we go
to
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apply
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hiking, we cannot throw rubbish
to
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into
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 the river. Let's discuss the quality of
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air
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the air
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. The reasons
of
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for
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 the declining quality of
air
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is
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are
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 human activities
likes
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like
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 releasing fireworks. Nowadays, we
discovered
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have discovered
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 that
the
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apply
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air
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 pollution is extremely and entirely serious. People cannot see the sky clearly since the problem is
sereve
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severe
. If we don't solve the issue, we may
transform
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make
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 the same mistake
to
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with
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 our offspring. (about 155 words)

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planning
Plan what you will say. Put water plan and air plan in a clear order.
grammar
Use plain, exact word choice. Check spelling and form.
coherence
Link ideas with simple connectors like 'first', 'then', 'also', 'but'.
content
Give a clear line for each idea with a small reason or example.
content
The essay tries to talk about both water and air.
structure
It uses some simple phrases to show steps.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental regulations
  • sustainable construction
  • renewable energy
  • waste management
  • green zones
  • public awareness
  • contaminants
  • emissions
  • fossil fuels
  • air quality
  • water quality
  • eco-friendly
  • industrial pollutants
  • greenhouse gases
  • recycling
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