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Band 3.5

Essay topics: In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction. What measures can be taken to prevent this?

investing in renewable energy sources: Moving away from fossil fuels to wind, solar, or hydro power could lessen air and water pollution. Implementing stricter environmental regulations: Governments could enforce laws that limit the amount of pollutants industries can emit, ensuring cleaner production processes. Promoting sustainable construction practices: Encouraging the use of eco-friendly materials and techniques could reduce the environmental impact of construction projects. Establishing green zones: Designating areas where industrial and construction activities are prohibited can protect air and water quality in certain regions. Encouraging public transportation and electric vehicles: By reducing the number of vehicles on the road, air quality can improve significantly. In conclusion
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 problem has to be solved together as a comunity and can't be done by a couple of groups large copration have to work together.

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structure
Use a clear start. Give a short plan in the first line. Then write 3 body parts, each with one idea and one fact or example. End with a short finish.
coherence
Make ideas flow well. Use linking words like first, also, next, but, and. Put one idea in each paragraph.
content
Explain each point. For each measure, say how it helps and give one simple example.
grammar
Fix grammar. Use full sentences. Use capital letters and period. Keep to simple words.
lexical
Use plain words. Do not use long or hard words. Show you can plan and argue with simple talk.
content
You list many real ways to cut air and water harm.
organization
The idea of people and groups working together is seen.
ideation
More than one idea is given, not just one.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental regulations
  • sustainable construction
  • renewable energy
  • waste management
  • green zones
  • public awareness
  • contaminants
  • emissions
  • fossil fuels
  • air quality
  • water quality
  • eco-friendly
  • industrial pollutants
  • greenhouse gases
  • recycling
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