The pie chart below shows the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years.

The pie chart below shows the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie chart below shows the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years.
The pie charts compare various types of energy
production
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in France in the years 1995 and 2005, measured in percentages.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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gas, coal, and petrol dominated the energy
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,
while
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petrol was the only source that experienced a fall over the period.
To begin
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with, the largest share was seen with coal in both periods, at 29.80% in 1995 and at 30.93% in 2005.
This
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was closely followed by gas, with 29.63% in 1995 and 30.31% in 2005, exhibiting a marginal difference and ranking second.
However
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,
although
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petrol remained one of the major sources, its share fell sharply from 29.27% to 19.55%.
In contrast
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, power creation did not rely on nuclear and other sources as much as the previous kinds of energy
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;
thus
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, power generation only used nuclear to a slight extent, which accounted for 6.40% and rose to 10.10%.
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, other methods of power
production
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nearly doubled their figure, increasing from 4.90% to 9.10%.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words production with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy
  • share
  • part
  • type
  • year
  • increase
  • decrease
  • rise
  • fall
  • grow
  • drop
  • up
  • down
  • more
  • less
  • than
  • compared with
  • in contrast
  • whereas
  • overall
  • generally
  • largest
  • smallest
  • big
  • small
  • percent
  • in year 1
  • in year 2
  • unchanged
  • stable
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