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You are a student at an English language school in Brighton and are living in private accommodation with other flatmates. You have not had hot water or heating for some time. The landlord’s workmen have tried to fix the problem but without success. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter, state your reason for writing describe the problems and explain how you feel propose a solution and risk the landlord to take action

Hello Mr. Singh, I am writing
this
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 letter to bring your attention to a problem in your flat. I am a tenant who
live
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lives
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 in 34
house
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34-house
 apartment in Brampton. The heating
system
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 is not working.
As a result
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, we have neither hot water for utilizing nor a heat
system
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 for warming up our rooms.
Last
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 week, one of my flatmates fell sick
due to
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 bathing in cold water.
Moreover
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,
It
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it
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 is quite hard for us to live in the flat without having
the
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a
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 heat
system
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 because the temperature sometimes goes down to around -10
degree
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degrees
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. Workers have tried many times to fix it, but they
are
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have been
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 unsuccessful in solving the issues. I would like to recommend
you
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that you
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to
Verb problem
apply
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install a new heating
system
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. Without it, we would fall sick in
these
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the
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 upcoming days. If the repair
take
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takes
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times
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time
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, it is my
humble
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humbly
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 request
if
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that
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 you provide a temporary heat
system
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 and hot water. I am hoping that you will take appropriate action. Yours
Sincerely
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sincerely
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, Rupinder Kaur.

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task response
Explain in a clear plan what you want and by when. Keep to one request per point.
coherence
Put one idea in each paragraph and show a clear order from problem to fix.
format
Use a proper greeting and a closing with your name.
language
Check spelling and grammar and write in simple, plain English.
tone
Ask for fast action and a date if you can.
content
The letter shows what the problem is and what you want.
tone
The tone is polite.
content
It shows the effect on living in the flat.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • landlord
  • flat
  • hot water
  • heating
  • repair
  • fix
  • workmen
  • come
  • date
  • plan
  • today
  • later
  • please
  • thank you
  • we
  • I
  • us
  • our
  • problem
  • cold
  • sleep
  • study
  • health
  • house
  • room
  • shower
  • tired
  • need
  • want
  • action
  • inform
  • update
  • for
  • in
  • with
  • this
  • that
  • there
  • here
  • and
  • or
  • but
  • also
  • to
  • could
  • can
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