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Writing Samples
Band 4

Agree or disagree to the fact that taxes should be imposed on workers

There is no denying the fact that taxes play a vital role in developing and constructing the infrastructure of nations.
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, some individuals consider that
,
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apply
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 taxes should be applied
on
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to
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 various sectors. Employment and workers are part of the community; they must
be contributing
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contribute
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the
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to the
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 economic system of their homes.
from
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From
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 my perspective,
i
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I
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 consider that
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 matter strongly depends on many aspects, including the amount of salary, the type of profession and social status.
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This
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These
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 factors are crucial when applying tax on the population.
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, it helps the government to
makes
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make
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decision
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decisions
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 among workers. Personally, I agree to impose fees on all employers, because
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 money leads to providing a safe life among community members, especially young and adults
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, the elderly can benefit from
this
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 cash via public health services.
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, the army
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also can
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can also
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 get
proportion
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a proportion
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 from taxes.
This
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 measure should be done in an excellent way, under strong laws against those who
refused
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 to engage.
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, the public who are
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applying
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this
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 trend
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apply
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 should
be
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apply
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find many benefits
,
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.
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For instance
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,
such
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 as free health and education services,
also
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 low
price
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prices
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of
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for
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 transportation networks.
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, these regulations must be observed by specialists.
About poor
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or
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people or
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 workers with low incomes may be excluded. and focusing on those with high incomes,
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 can
makes
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make
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 a balance and provide justice and fairness. In conclusion,
this
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 issue is very useful for needy people, and it should be applied in all countries around the world, whether richer or poorer. And spread awareness
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apply
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 everywhere about the benefits of
pay
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paying
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cost
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costs
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.

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task
Make your view clear at the start. State Yes or No and a quick reason.
task
In the next part give one strong idea with a simple example.
coherence
Use one idea per paragraph. Start with a topic sentence and end with a short idea.
coherence
Use linking words like First, Also, However to show how ideas go with each other.
language
Keep sentences clear and short. Use plain words from the top 100 list.
grammar
Check grammar: subject-verb, noun, and article use.
vocabulary
Try to give one real example, even a simple one, to show your point.
content
The essay shows a clear view that taxes can fund health and army.
structure
There is an end that restates the view, so a conclusion is shown.
content
There are ideas about what taxes can do in a country.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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