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The line graph below shows the number of complaints received by the complaints department of a single airline over a six-month period in 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features making comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the number of complaints received by the complaints department of a single airline over a six-month period in 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features making comparisons where relevant.
The line chart below displays the
number
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 of
complaints
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 received by the
complaints
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department
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 of just one airline from January to June in the year 2009.
Overall
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, the
complaints
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 in person increased gradually over the entire time period;
in contrast
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, the sent
complaints
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 by email or fax decreased
consestinly
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consistently
.
Whereas
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 those who called the
department
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 to complain
were
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fluctuated. In detail,
complaints
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 in person increased significantly from the lowest in January , with just above 400 , to the highest
number
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 in June at around 1900
complaints
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 , overtaking
complaints
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 by email and phone.
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, the
number
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 of
complaints
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 that were sent to the
department
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 by email or fax was the second highest , with approximately 750
complaints
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 before it declined steadily , reaching 350
complaints
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 by May,
then
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 it remained stable until the end of the recorded period. People who called the
department
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 to complain were the highest in the first month of the year
with
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, with
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 around 950
complaints
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,
then
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 it started to fluctuate
through
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 the whole 6 months, but it ended up increasing to 1600
complaints
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becoming
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, becoming
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 the highest
number
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 of
complaints
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 after
complaints
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 in person.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, complaints, department with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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