The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

Beechwood
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farm
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Farm
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which
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established
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was established
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in
1950
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1950,
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have
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a major
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changes
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during
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over
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the years
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. In
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this
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article
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i
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I
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would like to show the difference between the
farm
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in the
bast
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past
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and nowadays
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according
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, according
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to the size of the
farm
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and the building
faculties
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facilities
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. Beechwood historical
farm
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back in 1950, we can see that it was contained a large
area
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for sheep which is quite big space for raising animals,
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barn takes huge
area
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aroud there, farmhouse was next and
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chickens cottage which is behind the rever, on the other side the plants
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which only contains vegetables, soft fruit and fruit trees which was obviously a large areas that was empty and unexploited from the
farm
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owners. Unlike nowadays,
farm
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have been developed and used wisely with new technology and better strategy of dividing and exploiting the land
area
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,
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the large sheep
area
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in the past was transformed to a camping field with more trees and tents which is useful for the
farm
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visitors and it have been associated with modern solar panels system wich covers almost all areas around the
farm
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more over there is two parking lots on both farms side to contain all cars for the visitors, in my perspective the most useful addition to the
farm
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was adding
farm
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shop which is
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the visitors opinion olso was the most useful because it offer fresh foods coming directly and freshly from the
farm
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.
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, in
2023
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a small survey was made in the
farm
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town
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resulted
that
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88% of people
was
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being
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satisfied
from
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with
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the development that
happened
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had happened
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in the
farm
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and
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it made more people from other villages
wanting
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to come and visit the
farm
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or
interested
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were interested
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in staying there.

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task
Task response is not full: you should give a clear overview and a short summary of the main changes at 1950 and today.
coherence
Ideas are not tied well. Use 3 clear points and keep to the plan.
grammar
Grammars need work. Keep to simple forms and check verb tense.
coherence
Use paragraphs with a clear intro, then 2 body parts with one idea each, and a short end.
coherence
Use linking words like in 1950, now, also, but, and so to show links.
content
Shows a clear change over time.
content
Gives some real details on changes (land, shop, parking).
organization
Attempts to compare past and present.

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