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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Task One: A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter 1) give contact details for when you are away 2) give instructions about how to care for your pet 3) describe other household duties Y ou do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear .....................,

Dear...Anna Hope you are doing well
and
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, and
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 thank you so much that you will look after my house. I am writing to explain some details for you
while
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 I'm going away to Bali. In case
if
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apply
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you have
emergency
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an emergency
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isuuse
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issue
 and want to contact me, please call me 0415278565
,
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. This
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this
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 phone number
I have
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has
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 open roaming service, so you can reach me
out
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anytime. To take care
my
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of my
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 pet, his name is Luky
,
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.
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 He is a good dog and very friendly. He only
have
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has
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 one time a day to feed him
that
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, that
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 in the afternoon
but
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, but
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 he
drinking
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drinks
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 water for the whole day, so you can fill water in the big
blow
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bowl
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 for
him
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him,
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that
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which
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 should be enough for all day long. He
like
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likes
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 to play with him a bit to
care
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make sure
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 that he
not
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is not
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lonelyness
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lonely
.
Finally
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, you can get into my house from the backyard side as it
have
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has
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automatic
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an automatic
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 door locking and the password number is 1224. The light will
automatic
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automatically
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tunr
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turn
 on. If you have anything to
ask
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ask,
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 please call me. Keep in touch Oummie

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structure
Put each idea in its own paragraph.
content
Give clear steps for pet care, like what to feed, how much, and when to give water.
grammar
Fix big grammar and make sentences clean and short.
security
Do not show a door code in a letter, or tell your friend to keep it safe.
grammar
Check spelling and list the days or times more clearly.
content
You tell how to contact you if there is a problem.
content
You mention the pet and the house tasks.
tone
The letter keeps a friendly tone and a closing.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gratitude
  • Pet sit
  • Contact details
  • Feeding schedule
  • Dietary restrictions
  • Exercise routine
  • Medication
  • Watering plants
  • Collecting mail
  • Trash disposal
  • Security system
  • Appliances
  • Clarification
  • Reassurance
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