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The two charts provide data about two types of TV programmes watched by women and men and four separate age groups in Australia.

The two charts provide data about two types of TV programmes watched by women and men and four separate age groups in Australia.
The provided bar charts illustrate the proportion of Australians who watch two types of TV shows by gender and four
age
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 groups.
According to
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 the data, a clear disparity is seen between both genders,
whereas
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 males prefer to watch
game
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 shows,
while
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 females reported
conversely
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.
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, both types of TV programmes were favoured by people aged 45 and up. As shown in the charts, around 35% men and 70% women in Australia watch reality shows. Meanwhile, 60% of each gender prefer to enjoy
game
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 shows. Moving to the next category, an upward trajectory is shown in the trend of reality
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 audience by
age
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 groups. Starting with nearly half of Australians who watch
this
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 TV
show
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, the number increases gradually across
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 groups and reaches almost 70% adults.
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,
game
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show
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 spectators report a fluctuating trend. Counted at a similar number with the other type of film among teenagers and young adults, individuals aged 25-34 and 35-44 who engage in
game
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 shows are the fewest, accounting for about 40%. Interestingly, the most viewers of the
game
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show
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 come from the oldest
age
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 group,
attracted
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accounting for
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 about 70% of them.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, game, show with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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