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The line graph illustrates the younger people's preferences among vehicles, motorcycles, and bicycles. The unit was measured by percentage.

The line graph illustrates the younger people's preferences among vehicles, motorcycles, and bicycles. The unit was measured by percentage.
The line graph illustrates the younger
people
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's preferences among vehicles,
motorcycles
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, and
bicycles
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. The unit was measured by percentage.
Overall
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,
Cars
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 were the most preferred among younger
people
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,
while
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motorcycles
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 were the least
favorite
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favourite
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 transportation.
In addition
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,
bicycles
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 were used moderately in all countries. Australian youngsters used
cars
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 more than others by 60%
whereas
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bicycles
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 less by 10%.
In contrast
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, 20% of younger
people
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 used
motorcycles
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.
Similarly
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, the US had the same pattern of usage, the highest percentage was for
cars
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, around 80%
while
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bicycles
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 reached 60% and
motorcycles
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 were not popular, approximately 22%.
On the other hand
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, the number of younger
people
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 who used
cars
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 in Canada and New Zealand had the same percentage at 50%
while
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bicycles
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 were the second
favorable
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favourable
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 and varied between 35% to 45%.
Motorcycles
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 were more commonly used in New Zealand than in Canada 40% and 30% respectively. Vehicles and
Bicycles
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 were popular among younger
people
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,
while
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motorcycles
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 were not commonly used.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, motorcycles, bicycles, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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