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Many people use social media every day to keep in touch with friends and get social news. Do you think the advantages of it outweigh the disadvantages?

In today`s fast-paced world, everyone is addicted to social media and
keep
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keeps
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 themselves busy with friends and
get
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gets
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 some useful social
informations
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information
. In my opinion, there
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 many good benefits
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such
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, such
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 as health
update
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updates
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, news of a local region and
advertisement
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advertisements
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, which outweigh the drawbacks
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such
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, such
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 as addiction and longer screen
time
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.
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 with, there are many advantages of using social
apps
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everyday
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every day
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 to get
information
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.
Due to
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this
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,
yongers
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young people
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 and
elder
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 people are spending
long
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a long
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time
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 on
phone
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the phone
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 nowadays, they
comonly
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commonly
using
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use
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internet
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the internet
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 and
application
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applications
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 like
lnstagram
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Instagram
,
facebook
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Facebook
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 and
twitter
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Twitter
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.
Moreover
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, connectivity of
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this
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these
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apps
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 can provide many news from friends, family and
neighboors
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neighbours
,
while
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 same
time
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instagram reels
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Instagram Reels
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 and
youtube shorts
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YouTube Shorts
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 can make everyone aware of
information
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, news and motivational content.
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, there was
a
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apply
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research done in the Times of India which says social platforms may provide
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 of knowledge for humans, as
this
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 can give data and
information
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 about almost every field.
On the other hand
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, using social media has various drawbacks in
current
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the current
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time
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.
As a result
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,
this
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 is an addictive substance for people
,
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apply
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 who
using
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use
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this
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 for
longer
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a longer
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time
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 in a day,
apps
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 can
make
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negative
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a negative
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 impact on
brain
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the brain
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, may lead to brain cancer.
Furthermore
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, longer screen
time
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 of
this
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 application
possibly
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may possibly
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 damage
mankind
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mankind's
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 eyes,
due to
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rays
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the rays
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 of
screen
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the screen
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 emit from the smartphone.
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, there is an article in the Times of India which mentioned
exessive
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excessive
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time
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spend
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 on smart devices may damage
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the humans
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humans
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human
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 brain and eyes, limited use of
this
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 can be beneficial for
source
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a source
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 of knowledge. In conclusion, controlled usage of
phone
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phones
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 and social
apps
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 can be beneficial, as
it
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they
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 can connect with loved ones and provide local
information
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,
while
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 extra
time
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 on
this
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 may lead to physical damage for humans.

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structure
Make one main idea per paragraph and keep the idea clear.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Fix common errors.
cohesion
Use simple linking words to show how ideas go from one to next.
task
Answer the question clearly and end with a short conclusion.
examples
Give one real and simple example that fits the point.
strength
Some useful ideas are given about how social media can help with news and stay in touch.
structure
The essay has an introduction and a closing part.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • outweigh
  • communication
  • connection
  • information
  • news
  • ideas
  • opinions
  • creativity
  • self-expression
  • networking
  • career opportunities
  • community building
  • support
  • distraction
  • addiction
  • privacy concerns
  • risks
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • mental health
  • comparison
  • self-esteem
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