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The diagram described below provides information about the recycling of plastic and glass containers. Give a summary of the information by selecting and reporting the main information and presenting relevant comparisons.

The diagram described below provides information about the recycling of plastic and glass containers. Give a summary of the information by selecting and reporting the main information and presenting relevant comparisons.
The diagram given illustrates the life cycle of how
plastic
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 and
glass
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 containers are recycled. First of all, the collected
plastic
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 and
glass
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 goods are taken from the collection and transported to the recycling centre, which takes from 5 to 10 days.
This
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 centre sorts out the
glass
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 by
coloy
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colour
 and
plastic
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 by thickness and quality.The next stages in
this
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 process differ from the material
due to
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 their
specify
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. Having been sorted, the
glass
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 is crushed in the
further
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 stage,
while
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plastic
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 is bunding and shedding.
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, both materials should be washed in order to create a durable product. Once the
glass
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 is melted, it
transports
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 to another machine for reshaping. Even though the same process is done for
plastic
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, it has been done by the same machine. After reshaping the production
labeled
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labelled
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 as
a
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apply
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new and ready for use.
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, it takes 3-8 weeks to start the process from the beginning.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic, glass with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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