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Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email: recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn explain how your friend could learn this sport suggest that you both learn this sport together Your Answer

Dear Raj, Hope
this
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 letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits. I was really happy to hear that you're interested in picking up a new sport-it's really
best
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the best
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 way to stay fit and have
a
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apply
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fun at
same
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the same
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 time. I'd highly recommend you
to
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apply
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try badminton. It's really easy to learn, not too physically
demanded
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demanding
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 and perfect for indoors, which would be perfect for
winter
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the winter
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 season. As I know that
you're
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you've
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 already got
couple
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a couple
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 of
title
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titles
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 in table tennis in school
competition
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competitions
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so
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, so
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that
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apply
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badminton would ideal choice for
leisure
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a leisure
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 activity for you. There
are
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is
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 a community centre located just
couple
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a couple
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 of blocks from both of us that
offered
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offers
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 training sessions twice
in
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apply
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a week, with friendly coaches who focus on the
basic
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basics
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 and gradually build the skills.
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, you don't have to worry about rackets and balls, as they will provide us
everything
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with everything
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 and
,
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apply
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 classes
would
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will
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 be
in
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at
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 different times so that time won't affect our
day to day
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day-to-day
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works
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work
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. Actually, I've been thinking
to
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of
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 taking up
the
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apply
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badminton myself, so why don't we learn it together? It'd be way more fun to train and practice with a friend, and we could
also
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 participate in
seasonal
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a seasonal
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 league together after we've improved a bit.
what
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What
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 do you think?
let
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Let
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 me know if you're interested-I'll check
class
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the class
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 schedule and we can sign in together.
your
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Your
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 lovingly, Rushabh Patel

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task response
In task response, add a clear opening that says why you write. State one plan in a simple, clear way. End with a short closing note.
coherence cohesion
In coherence, use short link words and simple order. Use paragraphs to separate ideas: intro, body, end.
content
Friendly tone and clear idea to learn badminton together
structure
You show a useful plan for how to learn and where it could happen

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advice
  • recommend
  • suitable
  • learn
  • coach
  • lessons
  • tutorial videos
  • practice
  • tennis club
  • group
  • schedule
  • regularly
  • participants
  • tournaments
  • friendly matches
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