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Band 3

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Providing Internet access is just as important as other services, such as building roads, so governments should offer Internet access to all of their citizens at no cost.

Nowadays,
Internet
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access
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 is one of the most important things used by
individuals
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.
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 not every mankind can have an
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 subscription, I agree that a nation should
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a
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apply
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free
existence
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access
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of
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to
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 the
Internet
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, because information can be
fastly
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quickly
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spreaded
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spread
 and accepted by citizens.
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,
this
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about
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the benefits of the free
use
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 of
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Internet
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the Internet
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 in a
country
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.
Internet
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access
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 has an impact
for
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 the growth of the
country
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, because its people can
use
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 it to search for any information,
such
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 as literature, music, and even high-class courses.
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, there is a famous website
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 Coursera, which we can
use
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 to
access
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 many courses globally, including arts, marketing, and finance.
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 benefits
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the increase of knowledge
individuals
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 can have in a
country
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. Other than that,
Internet
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access
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also
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 affects the growth of
economic
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the economic
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 sector in a
country
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.
Individuals
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 can
use
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Internet
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access
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 to do shopping activities, whether it is nationwide or worldwide shopping activities.
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,
individuals
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 from Australia can buy goods from Indonesia using a website like Amazon. All global transactions have a benefit to increase a
country
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's vitality. In conclusion, governments could give
a
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apply
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free
internet
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access
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 to all their citizens, so their
country
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 can have better growth in the educational and economic
sector
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sectors
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.

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structure
Use a clear topic sentence in each paragraph and keep ideas in a simple order to show how one idea leads to the next.
content
Add more detail to each point. Explain how free internet helps both school and work, and note possible limits like cost or rules.
grammar
Fix grammar and word choice. Use common words and avoid long, hard phrases.
language
Use only simple words and short sentences where you can to keep the meaning clear.
content
The writer shows a clear view and gives examples.
content
There is some real example use to back ideas.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital divide
  • online learning resources
  • societal equality
  • information age
  • economic participation
  • job seekers
  • e-commerce
  • personal finances
  • government services
  • online banking
  • public infrastructure
  • stifle competition
  • innovation
  • private sector
  • critical areas
  • accessibility
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